2014년 10월 26일 일요일

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We should encourage to use computer(Positive effects of computer)
Some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, computer can cause serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find lots of positive effects of computer. Today, Computers and the Internet have touched almost all aspects of life. Because, computer make people do their work very comfortably.
However it makes some problem too. As I say, It can cause addiction or some violent behavior because there are some violent and lewd things in cyber space. But I think positive effects are more than negative effects and we can eliminate the negative effects of computer through internet education and censorship. So I assert that we should not neglect to use computer but encourage. And to eliminate some problems, we should learn how to avoid some negative effects.
Actually, all people know that computer is very important.
My thesis statement is that we should encourage to use computer and remove negative effects. Actually, all people know that computer is one of the most important tool in human society and it has lots of effects. Today, most of people have their own computers and we could find it in anywhere. It is a very common tool today. But we can deny that it has been one of the most important tool for human. It is good at calculating and data retrieval and etc. Computer has been evolving our technologies and societies. And today, it was being a common tool, any people can take its advantages. But, it is not just a good thing. Because of popularizing, it took negative effects too. It make people addicted and some people could suffer from cyber violence. Because of these, some people say that computer is a bad thing and we should regulate to use it. But, Computer has positive effects more that negative effects. As you know that we can do our work easier, send e-mail, play games, chat with friends and make some friends. Also, I think that it is so harsh to regulate use it and people have an ability to solve these problems. And I found a book which has similar topic with my essay. It is ‘Internet policies and laws in 21century’ It has contents that problem of computer and solution to solve them.
Through my essay, People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and possibility to remove negative effects. People will use computer in more effective and more practical way. And people will not suffer from some of negative effects such as addiction of cyber violence. In my essay, internet means global computer network providing a variety of information and communication facilities, consisting of interconnected networks using standardized communication protocols. Effects of computer means positive and negative effects which were made by computer. I will accent the positive effects of computer and make solutions to remove some negative effects. And negative effects in my essay, there are addiction and cyber violence. Addiction is an internet addiction which is occurred by games or chats. cyber violence is a crime which is happened on cyber space. Some people could suffer from internet messenger or hacking. I will suggest solutions to solve these and finally I will argue that people should encourage computer and use it in a good way.
I think people should encourage to use computer and we can remove negative effects of computer. First, I will say about positive and negative effects of computer. Since computer appeared, human evolved rapidly. And today, we can take lots of advantages of computer. It makes communication faster and easier. We can send e-mail or chat with friends everywhere and everytime if we have computer. So we can share some informations, talk with friends and make some friends. And it makes researching things a lot faster and cheaper. For example. instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self diagnose yourself with information found online. we can also search lots of another things such as job, people, flights... Actually we can find everything in internet. And it is good at calculating and data arrangement. So we can do our works more comfortable. It was the reason that human could evolved rapidly. Also there lots of interesting things on cyber space. We can play games and watch movies or webtoon. When we are boring, it can make us exciting. If we use it adequately, it could be leisure activity. Computer gives lots of advantages and it has been good to people. Computer was a trigger to human evolving and today, I think we can't live well without computer. Computer is a part of our life and very useful tool.
On the other hand, computer has negative effects too. In our body, computer could damage our eyes and cut into much-needed sleep time. Also if some people use computer excessively, he or she could be addicted. Like this data, number of addicted people is increased gradually. It is one of the most dangerous problem. Some people who is internet-addicted could be an outsider from society.
They could think that cyber space is more comfortable and stable that real world. So they could not try to touch with real world. Also they can't do their work rightly. Because of computer, they can sleep lately, and it can damage to their day life. And another big problem is cyber violence.
In cyber space. most of people is anonymous. They use the internet without their real name and information. So, some people use this advantage badly. They attack some people and hack others computer. For example, in korea, woman who was an actless was committed suicide because of evil comments. She was suffered from cyber violence and took a bad choice finally. And another example, a group which name was 'anonymous' hacked the north korea government home page. Because of this, relationship between north and south korea was degraded. Like these, computer has lots of problems too.
However. I think that negative effects are not more than positive effects. Still computer is one of the most important and useful tool and has enormous advantages. Also if we take more care for computer, we could solve most of problems. I will say about solution to solve some problems. To protect computer addiction, we should make some rules and follow it. For example, people should not turn on the computer without precise purpose. And we can get some help from family. If you can't control yourself, family's advice could be efficient. Also time control software is one of the method to protect computer addiction. It announce that how many times you use to computer and over the set time it makes computer turned off. And in family, school, some institutions should educate their member. They should teach their member about danger of computer and how to prevent internet addiction. If you think that you already addicted, you could go to center of internet addiction and treat it. We can use computer without addiction if we take more care and try to remove it. And To solve cyber violence, we need not only personal effort but also government's effort to remove it. First, government educate people about riskiness of cyber violence, sickness of victim and how to remove it. And real-name policy is one of the method to remove cyber violence. I said, user of computer is anonymous and some people use this feature badly. So real-name policy will be efficient to reduce bad comments or abuses. Also people's think should be changed. Some people think that their comments will not harmful to others and bad comments are just kidding. It is definitely untrue. People should consider others situation and not think only for their interests. Most of problems, we can solve them through people and government's efforts. We should change our think and try to understand other situation and we can remove most of negative effects of computer.
Some people could say that people are easy to addict and it is hard to solve it. But I don't think so. Yes, people could be addicted, but people have an ability to escape. If some people who are addicted have a will to escape and try to it, I'm sure that they could solve the problem. Also some people could say that computer has lots of negative effects. Yes, it is true. But, I said it has more positive effects than negative effects. Computer has enormous positive effects. So we evolved rapidly trough computer and today do our works more comfortable and easier. I think that computer is very useful tool and people can make it more efficient and useful and if people have a will, they could not addicted and if they already addicted, they could escape from this.
In conclusion, we can't deny that computer is an astonished invention. It makes people evolved rapidly and make our works easier and comfortable. It has both of negative and positive effects. But computer has more positive effects than negative effects. Also If people have a wiil to remove the negative effects, people can do it. Because people have an ability to solve some problems. So I assert that computer is very good and useful tool and we should reject to use computer, but we should encourage to use it.

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