2014년 12월 6일 토요일

Final draft

We should encourage to use computer(Positive effects of computer)

 Today, Most of people would have and use computer. It means computer is very important thing in our society. Today, Computers and the Internet have touched almost all aspects of life. Because, computer make people do their work very comfortably. My argument is that we should encourage to use computer. As you know, computer is a dual-aspect thing. It could be useful but also it could harmful. It depends on state of user. Also we should know that how to make computer as a good thing. we can make some friends through chat with other and play a game. It is an entertain tool. It has enormous advantages. However, some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, a computer can cause a serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find that computer has more positive effects that negative effects. It is true that computer makes some problem. It can cause addiction or some violent behavior because there are some violent and lewd things in cyberspace. But as I said, computer has lots of positive effects and we can eliminate the negative effects of a computer. I will teach the methods a bit later. I assert that we should not neglect to use a computer but encourage. And to eliminate some problems, we should learn how to avoid some negative effects.

 My thesis statement is that we should encourage to use a computer and remove negative effects. Computer is a very common tool today. But we can't deny that it can give enormous effects to human. It is good at calculating and data retrieval and lots of thing. Computer has been evolving our technologies and societies. But, it has not just benefits. Because of popularizing, it took negative effects too. It makes people addicted and some people could suffer from cyber violence. Because of these, some people say that computer is a bad thing and we should regulate to use it. But, It sounds ridiculous. As you know that computer give us lots of help to live comfortably. We can do our work easier, send an e-mail, play games, chat with friends, make some friends and so many things. Now, Our life would be difficult to live without computer. In my essay, internet means global computer network providing a variety of information and communication facilities, consisting of interconnected networks using standardized communication protocols. Addiction is an internet addiction which is occurred by games or chats. Cyber violence is a crime that is happened on cyberspace. I will tell the lots of positive effects of computer and finally I will argue that people should encourage computer and use it in a good way. Through my essay, People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and Its importance. People could use a computer in more effective and more practical way. I will accent the positive effects of computer and argue with computer’s problem. People would be encouraged to use computer and though that computer is a good thing and very helpful to our life.

 I think people should encourage to use a computer. Computer has lots of benefits. Since a computer appeared, human evolved rapidly. And today, we can take lots of advantages of computer. It makes people communicate faster and easier. We can send an e-mail or chat with friends everywhere and every time if we have computer. So we can share some information, talk with friends and make some friends. It was a base of revolution. People have been able to share information easily because of computer, so people have been able to find and get enormous information. If we have a curiosity, we just send e-mail to friends or experts or search in internet. For example. Instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self-diagnose yourself with information found online. We can also search lots of another things such as job, people, flights... Actually we can find most of information on internet. Computer make us live in comfortable. Also it is good at calculating and data arrangement. So we can do our works faster and more comfortable. It was the reason that human could be evolved rapidly. We can deal with our work in a short time. And there are lots of interesting things on cyberspace. We can play games and watch movies or web toon. When we are boring, it can make us exciting. If we use it adequately, it could be a leisure activity. If we see deeply, our society is made by computer. It is not exaggeration. Think our school and home. Most of teacher use a computer to teach students. Computer can carry lots of information and it can make some programs which is useful to teach. Teacher can give influent education to students. Students can use it effectively too. In school or home, they can search some curious things and could be learned through e-learning. It makes people easier to teach and learn than before. And our technologies are developed rapidly by computer. Most of scientists use computer to survey and process data. It is because computer can process enormous data in short time. So scientists need less time that before to study. Because of computer's ability, our science have been developed amazingly. For example, people can study about space and even we can go there. Space science needs processing of enormous data. If people don't have computer, it would be an unthinkable think that human can go to space. Moreover, computer is important between countries. All country need a computer to trade with other countries or share their information. Without computer, we must to go to other country to deal with trivial thing. So, computer is very important for human. Computer gives lots of advantages and it has been good to people. Computer was a trigger to human evolving. I think we can't live well without computer in now. Computer is a very useful tool and one of the most important part of our life.

 It is true that computer has negative effects too. In our body, computer could damage our eyes and cut into much-needed sleep time. Also if some people use computer excessively, he or she could be addicted. It is one of the most dangerous problem. Some people who are internet-addicted could be an outsider from society. However, I think that negative effects are not more than positive effects. Still computer is one of the most important and useful tools and has enormous advantages. And if we take more care for computer, we could solve most of problems. To protect computer addiction, we should make some rules and follow it. For example, people should not turn on the computer without precise purpose. And we can get some help from family. If you can't control yourself, family's advice could be efficient. Also time control software is one of the methods to protect computer addiction. It announces that how many times you use to computer and over the set time it makes a computer turned off. And in family, school, some institutions should educate their member. They should teach their member about danger of computer and how to prevent internet addiction. If you think that you already addicted, you could go to a center of internet addiction and treat it. We can use a computer without addiction if we take more care and try to remove it. And To solve cyber violence, we need not only personal effort but also government's effort to remove it. First, government educate people about riskiness of cyber violence, sickness of victim and how to remove it. And real-name policy is one of the methods to remove cyber violence. I said, user of computer is anonymous and some people use this feature badly. So real-name policy will be efficient to reduce bad comments or abuses. Also people's think should be changed. Some people think that their comments will not harmful to others and bad comments are just kidding. It is definitely untrue. People should consider others situation and not think only for their interests. Most of problems, we can solve them through people and government's efforts. We should change our think and try to understand other situation and we can remove most of negative effects of computer. We have the power to solve all problem. As I say, we can fix computer’s problem and computer has more positive effects. So it is ridiculous that computer is harmful and make people idiot. Computer is one of the best invention to human.



 In conclusion, we can't deny that computer is an astonished invention. It makes people evolved rapidly and make our works easier and comfortable. Computer makes us live in comfortable and developed our society. Our science is developed rapidly by computer. Moreover it consolidate the globe. It is true that computer has both of negative and positive effects. But computer has more positive effects than negative effects. Also If people have wiil to remove the negative effects, people can do it. Because people have the ability to solve some problems. So I think that computer is very magnificent and useful tool and we should reject to use a computer. I really assert that we should encourage to use it.

2014년 11월 14일 금요일

Second draft

I fixed my introduction and added more advantages of computer to strengthen my arguements. Also I modified the methods to solve some computer's problem.


 second draft


We should encourage to use computer(Positive effects of computer)
 
 
 
Do you have a computer? or Do you like computer? Most of people would have and use computer. Do you agree that computer is a good thing? My argument is that we should encourage to use computer. I will say computer’s effects of positive and negative. As you know, computer is a dual-aspect thing. It could be useful but also it could harmful. It depends on state of user. But I will also say that how to make computer as a good thing. Today, Computers and the Internet have touched almost all aspects of life. Because, computer make people do their work very comfortably. Also we can make some friends through chat with other and play a game. It is an entertain tool. It has enormous advantages. However, some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, a computer can cause a serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find lots of positive effects of computer. Yes, computer makes some problem. It can cause addiction or some violent behavior because there are some violent and lewd things in cyberspace. But I think positive effects are more than negative effects and we can eliminate the negative effects of a computer. I will teach the methods a bit later. I assert that we should not neglect to use a computer but encourage. And to eliminate some problems, we should learn how to avoid some negative effects. I will explain about this.
Actually, All people know that a computer is very crucial. My thesis statement is that we should encourage to use a computer and remove negative effects. Actually, All people know that a computer is one of the most important tools in human society and it has lots of effects. Today, most of the people have their computers and we could find it in anywhere. It is a very common tool today. But we can deny that it has been one of the most important tool for human. It is good at calculating and data retrieval and etc. Computer has been evolving our technologies and societies. And today, it was a common tool, any people can take its advantages. But, it is not just a good thing. Because of popularizing, it took negative effects too. It makes people addicted and some people could suffer from cyber violence. Because of these, some people say that computer is a bad thing and we should regulate to use it. But, Computer has positive effects more that negative effects. As you know that we can do our work easier, send an e-mail, play games, chat with friends and make some friends. Also, I think that it is so harsh to regulate a use it and people have the ability to solve these problems. And I found a book that has a similar topic with my essay. It is ‘Internet policies and laws in 21century’ It has contents that problem of a computer and solution to solve them.
Through my essay, People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and a possibility to remove negative effects. People will use a computer in more effective and more practical way. And people will not suffer from some of the negative effects such as addiction of cyber violence. In my essay, internet means global computer network providing a variety of information and communication facilities, consisting of interconnected networks using standardized communication protocols. Effects of computer mean positive and negative effects that were made by computer. I will accent the positive effects of computer and make solutions remove some negative effects. And negative effects in my essay, there are addiction and cyber violence. Addiction is an internet addiction which is occurred by games or chats. Cyber violence is a crime that is happened on cyberspace. Some people could suffer from internet messenger or hacking. I will suggest solutions to solve these and finally I will argue that people should encourage computer and use it in a good way.
I think people should encourage to use a computer and we can remove negative effects of computer. First, I will say about positive and negative effects of computer. Since a computer appeared, human evolved rapidly. And today, we can take lots of advantages of computer. It makes communication faster and easier. We can send an e-mail or chat with friends everywhere and every time if we have computer. So we can share some information, talk with friends and make some friends. And it makes researching things a lot faster and cheaper. For example. Instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self-diagnose yourself with information found online. We can also search lots of another things such as job, people, flights... Actually we can find everything on internet. And it is good at calculating and data arrangement. So we can do our works more comfortable. It was the reason that human could be evolved rapidly. Also there are lots of interesting things on cyberspace. We can play games and watch movies or web toon. When we are boring, it can make us exciting. If we use it adequately, it could be a leisure activity. Computer gives lots of advantages and it has been good to people. Computer was a trigger to human evolving and today, I think we can't live well without computer. Computer is a part of our life and very useful tool.
On the other hand, computer has negative effects too. In our body, computer could damage our eyes and cut into much-needed sleep time. Also if some people use computer excessively, he or she could be addicted. It is one of the most dangerous problem. Some people who are internet-addicted could be an outsider from society.
They could think that cyberspace is more comfortable and stable that real world. So they could not try to touch with real world. Also they can't do their work rightly. Because of computer, they can sleep lately, and it can damage to their day life. And another big problem is cyber violence.
In cyberspace, most of people is anonymous. They use the internet without their real name and information. So, some people use this advantage badly. They attack some people and hack others computer. For example, in Korea, woman who was an actress was committed suicide because of evil comments. She was suffered from cyber violence and took a bad choice finally. And another example, a group that name was 'anonymous' hacked the North Korea government’s homepage. Because of this, relationship between north and south korea was degraded. Like these, computer has lots some problems too. But we can remove these problems.
I think that negative effects are not more than positive effects. Still computer is one of the most important and useful tools and has enormous advantages. And if we take more care for computer, we could solve most of problems. I will say about solution to solve some problems. To protect computer addiction, we should make some rules and follow it. For example, people should not turn on the computer without precise purpose. And we can get some help from family. If you can't control yourself, family's advice could be efficient. Also time control software is one of the methods to protect computer addiction. It announces that how many times you use to computer and over the set time it makes a computer turned off. And in family, school, some institutions should educate their member. They should teach their member about danger of computer and how to prevent internet addiction. If you think that you already addicted, you could go to a center of internet addiction and treat it. We can use a computer without addiction if we take more care and try to remove it. And To solve cyber violence, we need not only personal effort but also government's effort to remove it. First, government educate people about riskiness of cyber violence, sickness of victim and how to remove it. And real-name policy is one of the methods to remove cyber violence. I said, user of computer is anonymous and some people use this feature badly. So real-name policy will be efficient to reduce bad comments or abuses. Also people's think should be changed. Some people think that their comments will not harmful to others and bad comments are just kidding. It is definitely untrue. People should consider others situation and not think only for their interests. Most of problems, we can solve them through people and government's efforts. We should change our think and try to understand other situation and we can remove most of negative effects of computer. We have the power to solve all problem. As I say, we can fix computer’s problem and computer has more positive effects.
Some people could say that people are easy to addict and it is hard to solve it. But I don't think so. Yes, people could be addicted, but people have the ability to escape. If some people who are addicted have a will to escape and try to it, I'm sure that they could solve the problem. Also some people could say that computer has lots of negative effects. Yes, it is true. But, I said it has more positive effects than negative effects. Computer has enormous positive effects. So we evolved rapidly trough computer and today do our works more comfortable and easier. I think that computer is very useful tool and people can make it more efficient and useful and if people have a will, they could not addict and if they already addicted, they could escape from this. And To strengthen my argument, I will say more advantages. Today, e-commerce become an important of life. We do not have to move. We just click something on homepage. Then we can receive what I want. Also we can study through e-learning. We can watch lots of lesson at home. It is cheaper than academy and more convenient. And one of the most useful advantage is that computer integrate all over the Earth. One person who live in Korea can communicate with another person who live in America. People from each country can send an e-mail and share information each other. Because of computer, people’s life radius is larger that before and deal with their works more quickly. So it is ridiculous that computer is harmful and make people idiot. Computer is one of the best invention to human.
In conclusion, we can't deny that computer is an astonished invention. It makes people evolved rapidly and make our works easier and comfortable. It has both of negative and positive effects. But computer has more positive effects than negative effects. Also If people have a wiil to remove the negative effects, people can do it. Because people have the ability to solve some problems. So I assert that computer is very magnificent and useful tool and we should reject to use a computer. We should encourage to use it.
 

2014년 10월 26일 일요일

First draft

We should encourage to use computer(Positive effects of computer)
Some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, computer can cause serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find lots of positive effects of computer. Today, Computers and the Internet have touched almost all aspects of life. Because, computer make people do their work very comfortably.
However it makes some problem too. As I say, It can cause addiction or some violent behavior because there are some violent and lewd things in cyber space. But I think positive effects are more than negative effects and we can eliminate the negative effects of computer through internet education and censorship. So I assert that we should not neglect to use computer but encourage. And to eliminate some problems, we should learn how to avoid some negative effects.
Actually, all people know that computer is very important.
My thesis statement is that we should encourage to use computer and remove negative effects. Actually, all people know that computer is one of the most important tool in human society and it has lots of effects. Today, most of people have their own computers and we could find it in anywhere. It is a very common tool today. But we can deny that it has been one of the most important tool for human. It is good at calculating and data retrieval and etc. Computer has been evolving our technologies and societies. And today, it was being a common tool, any people can take its advantages. But, it is not just a good thing. Because of popularizing, it took negative effects too. It make people addicted and some people could suffer from cyber violence. Because of these, some people say that computer is a bad thing and we should regulate to use it. But, Computer has positive effects more that negative effects. As you know that we can do our work easier, send e-mail, play games, chat with friends and make some friends. Also, I think that it is so harsh to regulate use it and people have an ability to solve these problems. And I found a book which has similar topic with my essay. It is ‘Internet policies and laws in 21century’ It has contents that problem of computer and solution to solve them.
Through my essay, People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and possibility to remove negative effects. People will use computer in more effective and more practical way. And people will not suffer from some of negative effects such as addiction of cyber violence. In my essay, internet means global computer network providing a variety of information and communication facilities, consisting of interconnected networks using standardized communication protocols. Effects of computer means positive and negative effects which were made by computer. I will accent the positive effects of computer and make solutions to remove some negative effects. And negative effects in my essay, there are addiction and cyber violence. Addiction is an internet addiction which is occurred by games or chats. cyber violence is a crime which is happened on cyber space. Some people could suffer from internet messenger or hacking. I will suggest solutions to solve these and finally I will argue that people should encourage computer and use it in a good way.
I think people should encourage to use computer and we can remove negative effects of computer. First, I will say about positive and negative effects of computer. Since computer appeared, human evolved rapidly. And today, we can take lots of advantages of computer. It makes communication faster and easier. We can send e-mail or chat with friends everywhere and everytime if we have computer. So we can share some informations, talk with friends and make some friends. And it makes researching things a lot faster and cheaper. For example. instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self diagnose yourself with information found online. we can also search lots of another things such as job, people, flights... Actually we can find everything in internet. And it is good at calculating and data arrangement. So we can do our works more comfortable. It was the reason that human could evolved rapidly. Also there lots of interesting things on cyber space. We can play games and watch movies or webtoon. When we are boring, it can make us exciting. If we use it adequately, it could be leisure activity. Computer gives lots of advantages and it has been good to people. Computer was a trigger to human evolving and today, I think we can't live well without computer. Computer is a part of our life and very useful tool.
On the other hand, computer has negative effects too. In our body, computer could damage our eyes and cut into much-needed sleep time. Also if some people use computer excessively, he or she could be addicted. Like this data, number of addicted people is increased gradually. It is one of the most dangerous problem. Some people who is internet-addicted could be an outsider from society.
They could think that cyber space is more comfortable and stable that real world. So they could not try to touch with real world. Also they can't do their work rightly. Because of computer, they can sleep lately, and it can damage to their day life. And another big problem is cyber violence.
In cyber space. most of people is anonymous. They use the internet without their real name and information. So, some people use this advantage badly. They attack some people and hack others computer. For example, in korea, woman who was an actless was committed suicide because of evil comments. She was suffered from cyber violence and took a bad choice finally. And another example, a group which name was 'anonymous' hacked the north korea government home page. Because of this, relationship between north and south korea was degraded. Like these, computer has lots of problems too.
However. I think that negative effects are not more than positive effects. Still computer is one of the most important and useful tool and has enormous advantages. Also if we take more care for computer, we could solve most of problems. I will say about solution to solve some problems. To protect computer addiction, we should make some rules and follow it. For example, people should not turn on the computer without precise purpose. And we can get some help from family. If you can't control yourself, family's advice could be efficient. Also time control software is one of the method to protect computer addiction. It announce that how many times you use to computer and over the set time it makes computer turned off. And in family, school, some institutions should educate their member. They should teach their member about danger of computer and how to prevent internet addiction. If you think that you already addicted, you could go to center of internet addiction and treat it. We can use computer without addiction if we take more care and try to remove it. And To solve cyber violence, we need not only personal effort but also government's effort to remove it. First, government educate people about riskiness of cyber violence, sickness of victim and how to remove it. And real-name policy is one of the method to remove cyber violence. I said, user of computer is anonymous and some people use this feature badly. So real-name policy will be efficient to reduce bad comments or abuses. Also people's think should be changed. Some people think that their comments will not harmful to others and bad comments are just kidding. It is definitely untrue. People should consider others situation and not think only for their interests. Most of problems, we can solve them through people and government's efforts. We should change our think and try to understand other situation and we can remove most of negative effects of computer.
Some people could say that people are easy to addict and it is hard to solve it. But I don't think so. Yes, people could be addicted, but people have an ability to escape. If some people who are addicted have a will to escape and try to it, I'm sure that they could solve the problem. Also some people could say that computer has lots of negative effects. Yes, it is true. But, I said it has more positive effects than negative effects. Computer has enormous positive effects. So we evolved rapidly trough computer and today do our works more comfortable and easier. I think that computer is very useful tool and people can make it more efficient and useful and if people have a will, they could not addicted and if they already addicted, they could escape from this.
In conclusion, we can't deny that computer is an astonished invention. It makes people evolved rapidly and make our works easier and comfortable. It has both of negative and positive effects. But computer has more positive effects than negative effects. Also If people have a wiil to remove the negative effects, people can do it. Because people have an ability to solve some problems. So I assert that computer is very good and useful tool and we should reject to use computer, but we should encourage to use it.

First draft- conclusion

 In conclusion, we can't deny that computer is an astonished invention. It makes people evolved rapidly and make our works easier and comfortable. It has both of negative and positive effects. But computer has more positive effects than negative effects. Also If people have a wiil to remove the negative effects, people can do it. Because people have an ability to solve some problems. So I assert that computer is very good and useful tool and we should reject to use computer, but we should encourage to use it

First draft- refutation

1.What is my thesis? I think computer has lots of positive effects and people could remove some problems. So It could be a very useful tool.
2. What is the opposite position? Opposite position is computer is harmful and people should not use it.
3. What arguments can I anticipate? Opposite position can argue that computer has lots of positive effects, people are easy to addict, and it is hard to solve some problems.
4. How will I counter those arguments? People have an ability to solve lots of problems and computer has more positive effects than negative effects.

Some people could say that people are easy to addict and it is hard to solve it. But I don't think so. Yes, people could be addicted, but people have an ability to escape. If some people who are addicted have a will to escape and try to it, I'm sure that they could solve the problem. Also some people could say that computer has lots of negative effects. Yes, it is true. But, I said it has more positive effects than negative effects. Computer has enormous positive effects. So we evolved rapidly trough computer and today do our works more comfortable and easier. I think that computer is very useful tool and people can make it more efficient and useful and if people have a will, they could not addicted and if they already addicted, they could escape from this. 

First draft- confirmation

1. What is my thesis? Although some people say computer is harmful, I think computer has lots of positive effects and people could remove some problems. So It could be a very useful tool.
2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? I am using some statistical datas for negative effects of computer. through these, I will find problems. Also I am using experts opinion to solve problems.
3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My arguments almost based on logic evidence. I can find statistical data from reliable institution.
I think people should encourage to use computer and we can remove negative effects of computer. First, I will say about positive and negative effects of computer. Since computer appeared, human evolved rapidly. And today, we can take lots of advantages of computer. It makes communication faster and easier. We can send e-mail or chat with friends everywhere and everytime if we have computer. So we can share some informations, talk with friends and make some friends. And it makes researching things a lot faster and cheaper. For example. instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self diagnose yourself with information found online. we can also search lots of another things such as job, people, flights... Actually we can find everything in internet. And it is good at calculating and data arrangement. So we can do our works more comfortable. It was the reason that human could evolved rapidly. Also there lots of interesting things on cyber space. We can play games and watch movies or webtoon. When we are boring, it can make us exciting. If we use it adequately, it could be leisure activity. Computer gives lots of advantages and it has been good to people. Computer was a trigger to human evolving and today, I think we can't live well without computer. Computer is a part of our life and very useful tool.
On the other hand, computer has negative effects too. In our body, computer could damage our eyes and cut into much-needed sleep time. Also if some people use computer excessively, he or she could be addicted. Like this data, number of addicted people is increased gradually. It is one of the most dangerous problem. Some people who is internet-addicted could be an outsider from society.
They could think that cyber space is more comfortable and stable that real world. So they could not try to touch with real world. Also they can't do their work rightly. Because of computer, they can sleep lately, and it can damage to their day life. And another big problem is cyber violence.
In cyber space. most of people is anonymous. They use the internet without their real name and information. So, some people use this advantage badly. They attack some people and hack others computer. For example, in korea, woman who was an actless was committed suicide because of evil comments. She was suffered from cyber violence and took a bad choice finally. And another example, a group which name was 'anonymous' hacked the north korea government home page. Because of this, relationship between north and south korea was degraded. Like these, computer has lots of problems too.
However. I think that negative effects are not more than positive effects. Still computer is one of the most important and useful tool and has enormous advantages. Also if we take more care for computer, we could solve most of problems. I will say about solution to solve some problems. To protect computer addiction, we should make some rules and follow it. For example, people should not turn on the computer without precise purpose. And we can get some help from family. If you can't control yourself, family's advice could be efficient. Also time control software is one of the method to protect computer addiction. It announce that how many times you use to computer and over the set time it makes computer turned off. And in family, school, some institutions should educate their member. They should teach their member about danger of computer and how to prevent internet addiction. If you think that you already addicted, you could go to center of internet addiction and treat it. We can use computer without addiction if we take more care and try to remove it. And To solve cyber violence, we need not only personal effort but also government's effort to remove it. First, government educate people about riskiness of cyber violence, sickness of victim and how to remove it. And real-name policy is one of the method to remove cyber violence. I said, user of computer is anonymous and some people use this feature badly. So real-name policy will be efficient to reduce bad comments or abuses. Also people's think should be changed. Some people think that their comments will not harmful to others and bad comments are just kidding. It is definitely untrue. People should consider others situation and not think only for their interests. Most of problems, we can solve them through people and government's efforts. We should change our think and try to understand other situation and we can remove most of negative effects of computer.



http://www.iapc.or.kr/site/summainfo/showGuidePrevDetail.do
http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=2120025&cid=51004&categoryId=51004
http://cyberbullying.us/

2014년 10월 22일 수요일

research2

http://www.iapc.or.kr/main.do

In this cite, I can search some information about addiction and solution. Also it has statical datas.

http://cyberbullying.us/

I can find definition of cyber violence and examples.

http://nobullying.com/

In this sight, I can find statistical datas and advice of experts.

2014년 10월 21일 화요일

First dratf- narration

1. What do people already know about my topic?

 
all of people already know that computer is very important thing in society and It has lots of effects. Today, most of family have a computer and link to internet. Computer is good at finding informations or calculating. Also we can play games or chat with friends. We can make friends through computer. But these are can cause negative effects. Some people could be addicted in internet or suffer from cyber violation.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

Internet policies and laws in 21century by 임규철

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and possibility to remove negative effects. People will use computer in more effective and more practical way. And people will not suffer from some of negative effects such as addiction of cyber violation.

research resources

Negative Effects of Computer Addiction

Computer addiction can have a variety of negative effects on a person. The most immediate are social. The user withdraws from friends and family as he spends more and more time on the computer. Relationships begin to wither as the user stops attending social gatherings, skips meetings with friends and avoids family members to get more computer time. Even when they do interact with their friends, users may become irritable when away from the computer, causing further social harm.
Eventually, excessive computer use can take an emotional toll. The user gradually withdraws into an artificial world. Constant computer gaming can cause someone to place more emotional value on events within the game than things happening in their real lives. Excessive viewing of Internet pornography can warp a person's ideas about sexuality. Someone whose primary friends are screen names in a chat room may have difficulty with face-to-face interpersonal communication.
Over the long term, computer addiction can cause physical damage. Using a mouse and keyboard for many hours every day can lead to repetitive stress injuries. Back problems are common among people who spent a lot of time sitting at computer desks. Late-night computer sessions cut into much-needed sleep time. Long-term sleep deprivation causes drowsiness, difficulty concentrating, and depression of the immune system. Someone who spends hours at a computer is obviously not getting any meaningful exercise, so computer addiction can indirectly lead to poor overall physical condition and even obesity.
Eventually, the consequences of computer addiction will ripple through the user's life. Late-night use or use at work will affect job performance, which could lead to job loss. As the addiction takes its toll on family members, it can even lead to failed marriages [source: Young].
http://computer.howstuffworks.com/internet/basics/computer-addiction2.htm

Bad and good effects
Bad effects of computers: It can damage your eyes, it is easy for little kids to see porn or hook up with random old perverts from who knows where, it isolates people from the outside world, and many people become addicted to facebook/WoW and don't do their homework and fail out of college.

Good effects of computers: It makes communication faster and easier (receiving emails instantly vs. mailing a letter), it makes researching things a lot faster/cheaper (instead of going to your doctor and paying a ton of money for a doctor's visit, you may be able to self diagnose yourself with information found online), computers also make searching for jobs/schools/people/vacations/flights/ANYTHING faster, easier and cheaper

2014년 10월 1일 수요일

First draft - intro.

We should encourage to use computer and remove negative effects. (Positive effects of computer)



Some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, computer can cause serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find lots of positive effects of computer. Today, Computers and the Internet have touched almost all aspects of life. Because, computer make people do their work very comfotably and find informations easily.  
 However, as I say,  it makes some problem too. It can cause addiction or some violent behavior because there are some violent and lewd things in cyber space. But I think positive effects are more than negaitve  effects and we can eliminate the negative effects of computer through internet education and censorship.  And computer became one of the most important thing to people, so we can't neglect and remove it. So I assert that we should not neglect to use computer but encourage. And to eliminate some problems, we should learn how to avoid some negative effects. 
 

classical arguments outline

1. introduction.
 I will started by explaining computer and its effects:Some people say that computer is useful but it can cause negative effects such as addiction. Yes, computer can cause serious problem if someone use it excessively. But, if we think carefully, we can find lots of positive effects of computer.

2. narration
 I will say that definition of some terminologies and explain about effects of computer.:
People could recognize that computer has lots of positive effects and possibility to remove negative effects. People will use computer in more effective and more practical way. And people will not suffer from some of negative effects such as addiction of cyber violence.
3. confirmation
 I will accent the positive effects and suggest the solution to remove negative effects.:
I am using some statistical data for negative effects of computer. through these, I will find problems. Also I am using experts opinion to solve problems.

4. refutation
 I will refute that people are easy to addicted and positive effects are less than negative effects.

5. conclusion
 I will accent my arguments and thesis.

2014년 9월 28일 일요일

articulation

1.How can use computer in positive way

  I want to argue that computer's positive effects and how can people use computer positively.
Computer is very useful tool and we need it to develop our life. It is one of the most important part in human society.And people can use computer without any problems such as addiction. So I'll write about this.

2. my first research question was, what is the effects of computer? I could find positive effects of computer for my argument.Also I could find negative effects and from this, I could find my solution to solve the problem. This question is the indication for my essay.

 3. should find more logical information and opposite opinions.
   This is several questions that I research about
    1)How can we solve the problem on the cyber space?
    2)Why some people think computer is a bad thing?
    3)How can we use computer as a good way?

4.My argument has a connection to Harvard Sampler. Computer has been the most important tool for human. We need it to evolve. But today, It makes some negative effects and some people think that it is a bad thing. So, for people's development, we should change our negative thinks and solve some problems.

2014년 9월 10일 수요일

research proposal






 
what is my current topic?
 

We should encourage to use computer

  My topic is a positive effects of computer. I will say about method to protect some problems of computer   and accent the positive effects. 

What are my guiding questions?

What's the positive and negative effects of computer?
How can we solve the problem on the cyber space?

Why some people think computer is a bad thing?

How can we use computer as a good way?

What are my current thoughts?

I know that computer is a tool which can make better and more comfortable life. But I know it can bring negative effects too. So I will accent the positive effects and teach that way to protect negative effects.

What is the opposition?

My opponents can say that computer is harmful because of lots of negative effects, so we should not use it. But advantage of computer is more than disadvantage. Today, computer is one of the most important part of people's life. I will say that computer give lots of advantage to people. 

2014년 9월 3일 수요일

research question

Is computer always give negative effects to people?
What's the positive and negative effects of computer?
How can we solve the problem on the cyber space?
Why som people think computer is a bad thing?
How can we use computer as a good way?